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Silhouette of Her |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time 
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Always lost within my head succumed to this lost sense of self still unable to undo this knot in my chest tied into a hollowness where sounds of love are echoes and nothing more Everything still so empty still so confused a burnt taste that never leaves my mouth feeling condemed without you every song every emotion leaves me yearning for outstretched arms but anchored down unable to move on unable to love so passionately again... "Pain! With out love, Pain, I can't get enough, Pain,I like it rough cuz i'd rather feel pain than nothing at all" - 'Pain' Three Days Grace |
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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248 |
Aww Kaos. THis is fantastic. Something about the way you set up your poems is so captivating; it always seems like put so much more thought into it than i do. Hope you're well, it's been awhile. -Keryn |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
this was great kaos. I agree with keryn. you always set your poems up to show when you think or where you pause. a breath maybe. it's great. i really liked this on. heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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MixedChica Junior Member
since 2006-11-10
Posts 34 |
Kaos this is awesome. i agree with them, its constructed in a really cool way and its so deep and well written. |
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Shake Junior Member
since 2006-11-17
Posts 40 |
It was good.The structure was kinda wierd,but it didnt hurt the quality of the poem. "When the rich wage war,it's the poor that die."-- |
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