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Teen Poetry #8

Every Time I'm with You

WaterFairy103
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since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

0 posted 2007-04-12 05:47 PM

I have to warn you that I'm no Mr. Hallmark,
and for all that I'm feeling, I don't know where to start.
I'm afraid I'm not good at using five-dollar words,
and what my heart is saying is screaming to be heard.
You wanted to know how your love feels,
and I'll have you know it makes my head reel.

It's a warm cup of coffee on a warm winter day,
it's the sun that comes shining when my skies turn gray.
It's the kind of feeling that's eternally new,
baby, that's how it is every time I'm with you.

I have to admit I feel kind of weird,
even though I know you wanted to hear it.
I wish I could use the words that poets are famous for,
but how does one describe something that means so much more?
Or the feeling that you send tingling up my spine,
I'll give it a shot, it's kind of like...

It's like a child's first taste of their favorite ice cream,
it's the comfort you get from Mom after a bad dream.
It's the first time yous lip into your new favorite shoes,
and that's how it is every time I'm with you.

It's the moment when something becomes perfectly clear,
it's when I say something sweet and your eyes cloud with tears.
It's the beat my heart skips when you say, "I love you, too."
Yeah, that's how it is every time I'm with you.

I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-04-14 01:08 AM

I really like this my favorite part is:
~It's the beat my heart skips when you say, "I love you, too."
Yeah, that's how it is every time I'm with you. ~

I can really relate to this..
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

2 posted 2007-04-17 07:05 AM

Hello, You did a really nice job on this. I love it! One thing I picked out though that didn't make too much sense
' It's a warm cup of coffee on a warm winter day, '
Isn't winter normally cold? lol maybe you could put cold winter day instead of a warm winter day. Anyhow, great job!

x0x0
Free_Spirit07
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

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