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Lonely For You
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Lonely For You |
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NCCXC86 Junior Member
since 2006-09-25
Posts 18Michigan |
Every time I'm thinking about The day coming around Well I'll be strong Well that's the day that passes into night It's like I can't hold on I'm uneasy And I'm weak in the knees And I'm trying not to breathe Not believing you're gone And that I was the one to let you go I'm so lonely for you I'm staring at the clock But the clock doesn't talk It just stands still A head full of fuzz And a puzzle that adds up to a scandal No, I can't handle these nights So I shudder to think When the nights turn to weeks Am I all right? I'm so lonely for you And when the rain comes It will fall and that's okay And when the sun comes out It's going to be a beautiful day All I know is that I'm so lonely for you I look out the window I'm trying to live with this And I hear your voice on the phone You give me something to miss Sweet lips to the touch Why, why does this hurt me so much? |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
I really liked this. It seemed that the rhythym was a little out of place in the beginning but leave it where it is because the last few lines pulled it all together. Great write. Hope to see more from you. Pen |
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Smiling Junior Member
since 2007-05-27
Posts 12Barbados |
nice |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
i don't know what to say i'm speechless it was very good |
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