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John O'Driscoll
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since 2006-03-13

Posts 43
Sandy, Utah

0 posted 2006-09-14 07:22 PM

i just saw a girl in a couple of my classes today and it was obvious that she was hiding something. it was so obvious that she was pretending she was alright but i knew that she wasnt. so this is for all the girls that pretend theyre alright, cuz you cant hide forever

someone who should be happy
is looking very sad
its obvious something happened
something tragic...something bad

there is something broken
deep down inside her soul
where now's a person broken
there was a person whole.

i see her walking dejectedly
down each and every hall
in her myriad of sadness
i sense no problem, small

shes faking, ducking, running
from who she is inside
but who you are beneath yourself
is something you cant hide

and yet whene'er i see her
i see something else there
its something shining brightly
for this light, i say a prayer.

but i cant choose what my eyes see
for both sides are in my sight
but its obvious something's happened
she's hiding darkness behind her light.

and its shining through...

True happiness is found after you think you have irretrievably lost it

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2006-09-14 08:25 PM

Wow, I was trying to pick out one particular stanza that I liked the most, but really I couldn't do it. This poem is just so amazing to me personally, because I feel like I am this girl sometimes.
I'm sure the girl would feel happy knowing that someone was able to see through the front she's been putting on and to know that they really do care about her. Nice job!

~Alli~

nostalgic*pride
Member

since 2006-08-23

Posts 122
NowhereVille

2 posted 2006-09-14 08:57 PM

Omg, this poem is sooo good. You say that you're only here to read. I don't see why. This stuff is awesome. Hope to see much more!

rebel~angel
Member

since 2006-06-20

Posts 71
Iowa USA

3 posted 2006-09-14 10:29 PM

I really love this. I can sort of relate and all that, but I know so many people who are exactly like what you're describing. It's so sad, that they think they CAN hide forever...they can't. Anyway, it was really awesome and I loved it!

Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming.
-Elizabeth Haydon, Requiem for the Sun

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

4 posted 2006-09-14 11:44 PM

Hi John,

Welcome back! It's been awhile since I've seen your posts...

This poem was amazing! I really felt for that girl, as if I knew her, well, in a sense I have, I've know girls like her and have been like her.

Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece, it shows how much you care

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

5 posted 2006-09-15 10:24 AM

i felt reading it like i knew her. like i knew her really well. soo good. and i dont really know anyone like that rite now.

krazy 4 her
Junior Member

since 2006-09-14

Posts 38
Your parent's front porch

6 posted 2006-09-15 11:02 AM

I hate when that happens, when a girls looks so broken up but she refuses to stop pretending nothing's wrong. I know several girls exactly like this. But beyond that, I think this poem was great. Very true. Good job.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

7 posted 2006-09-15 10:42 PM

wow this was nicely written i loved it this definitly has my vote

write more i love your poems:P...
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

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