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Happily Ever After |
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WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
Don't you know that fairy tales tell a lie? Prince Charming is a player, Snow White wants to be a guy. Sleeping Beauty is just lazy, Rapunzel needs a cut, Ariel's a tomboy And Jasmine is a $lut. Happily ever after is a fake. You've always gotta give Just a little more than you take. Happiness shouldn't have to be an ending. All those princess are just pretending. When the fairy dust clears, You're in for a surprise, You married a Prince, sweetheart, And trust me, he's no prize.. Now that you're a Queen, You have to walk the walk, And when you get home late at night, Charming won't want to talk. Happily ever after isn't easy, You have to be willing To get queasy. Because you're the one who makes your happy ending, But you know that you're pretending. I know it's rough out there, You have to guard your heart. But you have to let someone in, Before something will start. Make your expectations real, And he'll come to you. And it'll be a lot of work, But it'll be worth it, too. Happily ever after isn't dead set. Because all those fairy tales Just aren't finished yet Happiness doesn't have to be an ending. All you have to do is stop pretending You've gotta stop daydreaming, True love won't find itself. You have to know who you are, Before you can be part of someone else. ~The flow isn't great, but these are lyrics, so unless you hear me singing it...~ Those who dance are considered insane by those who cannot hear the music. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Wow, I love this the 1st verse I was howling with laughter because well yah it was really blunt  and the rest I was nodding and going how true...hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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chiLanta Junior Member
since 2006-12-01
Posts 47 |
for real that was blunt but yea i liked it too good write keep em coming |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
I liked the first stanza. It made me laugh, and I needed to laugh. Thanks You are so talented..ur one of my fav writers here |
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SiR3N Junior Member
since 2007-03-07
Posts 16Pennsylvania |
I love how you integrated the fairy tale genre into this poem to get your point across. Splendid poem. ^_^ |
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unholyjudgement Member
since 2007-02-27
Posts 116Wherever my soul takes me next |
Short, Simple, & To The Point Luvved it thnx My mind is like lightning |
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Sweetpali08 Junior Member
since 2006-05-07
Posts 40 |
OMG.... This is just amazingly done. I love the way you expressed everything................ "How are they the VICTIMS if they are the OCCUPIERS?!" |
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*wishfull*thinking* Junior Member
since 2006-09-03
Posts 33north east of england |
wow my favourite stanza was the 1st onem a good read and a laugh lol keep it up lolxx I have been waiting all of my life |
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Thebaer Junior Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 10 |
At first i thought it cliche(dont know how to spell that)but as the poem progressed your way of words told how it is, and just what it takes to be loved. Good Job |
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thesongyoukeepsinging New Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 6Georgia, US |
wow... very honest.... i think that we do dream alittle too much!! great job ~Life is not about how many breaths you take, but the moments that take your breath away!!~ |
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MixedChica Junior Member
since 2006-11-10
Posts 34 |
This is amazing, i love this poem. I can't describe how awesome this is I'm like everyone else, i love the first stanza it cracked me up and really made me want to continue reading. |
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pencil&paper Member
since 2006-09-09
Posts 76asleep somewhere in my head |
GREAT poem and i have to agree i liked the first line best too "Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music."~Angela Monet |
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TayJay01 New Member
since 2007-04-24
Posts 9 |
I really liked this poem alot i cant wait to hear someone singing it GOOD JOB! so lets get a little closer noww<33 |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
i liked it alot it was very cool i could only imagine what itwould be like as a song being sung it would be very cool |
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wallflower313 New Member
since 2007-10-21
Posts 5 |
i absolutely loved it |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
i really cant tell you what i think about this poem because i cant really explain it. i can pretty much sum it up in only one word. briliance |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
These lyrics are amzing! I loved how you were able to seemingly rip apart the common fairy tale, and then use it to prove your point. I apologize if this sounds nosy, but did the bluntness stem from personal experience? The more you know, the more you know you don't know.-Socrates |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
I loved this. And it did actually flow quite nicely.Great Write. Pen |
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WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
Lol to answer your question, yeah, the bluntness does kind of stem from personal experience... I've been in too many relationships where I was the only one trying, lol, and I firmly believe that to make a relationship work both people have to work hard at it... Lol I was a little frustrated by mankind when I wrote this one, but it's one of my best so I'd do it all again! I SPEAK my mind because it HURTS to bite my tongue. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
love the name ARCTIC WIND |
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