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Myths that exist, history frozen in place, a tiny piece
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Myths that exist, history frozen in place, a tiny piece |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
A science assigment write a poem about space. Havent been on for too long. Soon as I Get the rest of my Hw finished tomorro all next week and tomorro poss starting I am gonna post my other stuff. Nine planets dot the sky thats beyond what we can touch. Filled with myths we've proved right. Myths of moons,worlds,stars and such. Bursting balls of flame, remanants of ancient stars perserved till now,the same. NOW we see,novas torn apart. Our own little planet means nought -except to us-figures haunting alien dreams. One tiny fragment in the lot. A single teardrop in an endless sea. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
ahhh many planets i always hated learning them in school but happily I am done wioth that yah. I think your teacher will be impessed If I got this right you are gonna show your teacher right? hmmm but good good... hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
It's rather hard to read, in some instances I feel like you are trying to rhyme and in others it is so... un-rhyme-like that I'm not sure. I know it's just a homework assignment and might not mean that much to you but there is something in this poem and it could be better. If you want me to say more I can or I'll just let this piece alone. lolz. I look forward as always to reading more of your work "I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->--- |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Tell me more sure I'll add to it if theres anything to add Ya i turned it in on fri |
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unholyjudgement Member
since 2007-02-27
Posts 116Wherever my soul takes me next |
"A single teardrop in an endless sea" Love the perspective |
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