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Teen Poetry #8

Alone

chiLanta
Junior Member

since 2006-12-01

Posts 47

0 posted 2007-02-09 08:25 PM

The snow use to glisten
When the sun rose into the sky
but the white ground stopped sparkling
As soon as I began to cry

The beauty in a lot of things
Seemed to have faded away
and In time, my heart cries
Breaking more and more each day

Colors have lost their brightness
The sky looks cold and gray
Even when the sun is out
I don't feel like coming out to play

I have felt so much hurt
and Stress beyond the page
No one seems to be able to help
This pain that grows with age

but I know tomorrow will be here
And again I'll feel the pain
but I'll try my hardest to make it
With only love to gain...

(rough draft once again)

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-02-09 11:04 PM

Very good poem, it had a good flow and was a good length...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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