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Teen Poetry #8

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Renegade
Junior Member

since 2006-10-21

Posts 22

0 posted 2007-02-04 11:43 AM

This isn't a very good poem, It doesn't rhymn much or anything else like that but i happen to have liked it:

My life seems to slip
As I fall into an abyss
As my eyes seem to shut
As I lose the feeling
Emotionless
this escape
that numbs my every sense
Yet cold as death
Yet cold as life
When the colors form around me
Swirling the water colors
Forming an infinite dream
Forming infinite nightmares
Darker than the abyss
Lighter than the life
Falling to my knees
Falling to my life
As quickly as it forms
It forms into my senses
Possesses my every move
And every step i walk
I watch you in your amazement
When you dissappear into shades
Shades of crimson
And you swirl like watercolors
As quickly as i fell in
I fall out again
falling once more
until my life comes back
As my eyes seem to wake
As I gain the feeling
Emotion

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

1 posted 2007-02-04 12:43 PM

mmm...very interesting. You know, i think i like it..it's starting to grow on me.I'll probably re-read it a few more times to try and entirely clutch in my mind the meaning of what you wrote. . .It didn't exactly rhyme to have flow, but it..flew well lol.

good job, hope to read more of your poetry soon!

ps-im adding it to my library..

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away..
my love is a waste of time
if you never stay

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