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um_idk Junior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 32minnesota |
we both no this isnt right when we hold each other thight we will never be anything we know its just a fling if we can even call it that tonight in your arms i still sat makin the shots doubles we let out our troubles when they ask your just a friend cause soon this will end |
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hollygal Junior Member
since 2006-12-30
Posts 21Alberta, Canada |
Umm, you may want to work on your spelling in several parts, and it seems that you used the word doubles only to create a rhyme with troubles. The word does not fit with the line, so perhaps you could rework those two line. however, i do think this is a pretty good poem. keep up the good work |
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