Teen Poetry #8 |
Goodbye |
Tee Junior Member
since 2006-12-20
Posts 26Belgium |
Tears start to roll over my face as I hold you in my arms, our last embrace Memories of us enter my mind I hold you tight Oh girl, you are truely one of a kind I will miss the love you gave me, it was so pure Miss everything about you, that I know for sure Your gentle touch, the way you walk and move your hips I hold you tighter Close my eyes, one final taste of your tender lips The train arrives, It's time For me to let you go, no longer are you mine I try to grab your hand, but you slip away Leaving me all alone With noone next to me, there to stay Falling on my knees in the mids of the crowd Looking at you entering the train, wanting to scream out loud But no sound comes out, only tears Leaving me shivvering on the ground Afraid of the lonely feeling for the upcoming years A loud crack in my heart as it breaks in two Leaving only memories Me and You I don't wish to be everything to everyone, but I would like to be something to someone. [This message has been edited by Tee (12-30-2006 01:51 PM).] |
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damo451 Junior Member
since 2006-12-29
Posts 18Western Australia |
I like this, it has a lot of feeling =D. Keep up the great work! |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
A loud crack in my heart as it breaks in two Leaving only memories Me and You~ Ending was very nicely put. I liked this Tee it has a beautiful story to it hunnie ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
this was one of my favorite poems i've read in a while. A nice fresh poem that the rhyming seemed to come naturally, as if a second thought rather than the main focus of the poem. I loved it. Great job! AIM-beatufu1tragidy |
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