Teen Poetry #8 |
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Old Songs & Red Nails |
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whitelielovely Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146Australia |
i sit there pianting my nails red thinking about wether or not your thinking of me too. its so silly that a song can bring you back to memory it's so hard to listen to this song and not think about what once was, me and you. it suprizes and frightens me to think that you sit there too listening to a song that reminds me of you i sit there painting my nails red, thinking of the time we once spent never thinking that we could speak again but you surpized me this time instead of the other way around i smile at the thought we are friends now but time flies won't stop buzzing they persist untill i give in so i think of you all from a song that brings back the past "Love is the irresistible desire to be irresistibly desired." Mark Twain [This message has been edited by whitelielovely (12-16-2006 01:10 PM).] |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
I thought that this was an amazing poem but I also think you could make it better by rearranging some of the stanzas. For example: it's so hard to listen to this song and not think about what once was me and you. its so silly that a song can bring you back to memory |
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whitelielovely Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146Australia |
thanks pen, that was most helpful -Lovely "Love is the irresistible desire to be irresistibly desired." |
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hunnie_girl![]() ![]()
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Very nice Lovely. ![]() hunnie ![]() ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
well i'm gald i found you whoever you are. lol. you have a most different style that's for sure. i love your stuff. it's very cute. -Red "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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