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Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

0 posted 2006-11-03 10:21 PM

can you see this beauty in a tear
it drips from the face of a heart forged of fear
can you see the crestfallen eyes
tempting the purest, and cruelest alike
an earthbound angel stuck in time
so many mistakes, one for every rhyme
the radiance of perfection shines
its here, writtin in these lines

i wish you could see
how much you mean to me
i want you to be
in the world i see
trapt and confused
i feel so used
but the meanings are still there

i love your face
percect in the light
glowing with a beauty
i have in my sight
i want you
i love you
i need you too

This is the only life you have, so live it to be remembered

[This message has been edited by Tempest (11-04-2006 07:54 AM).]

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

1 posted 2006-11-03 11:38 PM

This is great, The girl you write about must be very special, she just needs to wake up to reality and realize that she has a very special, talented guy in front of her who is trying so very hard for her attention. She doesn't realize what she is missing out on.

God i hope this girl wakes up to herself!

Awesome Write Temp,
Luv and Kisses,
Jessica xxoo

nick_lyss
Member

since 2006-08-21

Posts 88

2 posted 2006-11-04 04:14 PM

RevengeIsMine is right this girl needs to wake up and see whats in front of her because she has a really nice girl in front of her and who really likes her for her.
i wish i could meet a guy like you.
courtney

nick_lyss
Member

since 2006-08-21

Posts 88

3 posted 2006-11-04 04:14 PM

im sorry really nice guy in front of her

Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

4 posted 2006-11-05 04:59 AM

whoa, you can write, i dont think i know all too many guys that can, i have beem away from this for AGES, i see all my poems, well all old poems have been taken off, oh well, hey email me on [email protected], id love ya hear from you, laters

x0x0
Free_Spirit07
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

Aeris Nicole
Junior Member

since 2003-08-18

Posts 21

5 posted 2006-11-05 08:04 PM

this was a very outstanding piece.....loved it!!!

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

6 posted 2007-06-24 01:58 PM

you blow me away temp. WOW, most def my fave. i think our writing styles are alot alike.

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

7 posted 2007-06-26 07:14 PM

wow if this was written for someone they are lucky it was beautiful

Gifted
Member

since 2007-06-26

Posts 140
Caribbean

8 posted 2007-06-26 07:20 PM

I have to agree with everyone on this. The poem was nice. I guess you could say I know where you're coming from. Don't give up though, if it was meant to be it'll happen.

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