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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248
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as dreamers lie far from waking, the deceitful own the world. as lovers moan in passion, malevolent souls are born. from every dreary hour hopes are raised and dashed. and all the while i sit and stare as my life goes slowly past. philosophers will think great thoughts as stockbrokers make a sale and the innocent child within each heart sees innocence begin to fail aching hands reached out for me to draw me in as well, but nay, i do not take their hands for already im in hell. When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Wow..Keryn.. this is wonderful.. I love the whole thing.. you are an amazing writer.. the words in this sent chills through me.. wonderful .. going in my library (as always)  much love ~Heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Share me some of your talent, please. This was very witty and good. There wasn't any main point but I understood perfectly. My only suggestion would be punctuaion and check for spelling but other than that great |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
~as stockbrokers make a sale and the innocent child within each heart sees innocence begin to fail aching hands reached out for me to draw me in as well, but nay, i do not take their hands for already im in hell.~ ... this was my farorite part thanx for sharing... hunnie  Better a witty fool than a foolish wit. |
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