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Teen Poetry #8

i'm still ok

broken_smile1469
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since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

0 posted 2006-11-28 04:33 PM

this is not one of my best poems but i think its ok tell me what you think <3

I’m Still OK
Sometimes life is confusing
And does not go your way
Sometimes its hard to do
When you don’t know what to say
I think we’re better off
Going our separate ways
Its not that I don’t love you
Its just the way you are
I can’t keep worrying everyday
It is close to making me go insane
Without you I have way more fun
But still friends I want to be
Sometimes life is confusing
I hope you realize you’re not the one for me
When you told me it was over I begged you to come back
But that was before I knew, the truth is what I lack
When I thought with out you I’d cry
Not go on and want to die
I was oh so wrong when the nightmare came true
Because all I could do was laugh, I was finally over you
So now this day I am happy to say
Your not here, and I’m still ok

"in a world of cheerios, be a fruit loop"

Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

1 posted 2006-11-28 06:17 PM

i liked it, but ur right not one of ur best. still good tho, nevertheless.

ps. will u read my one called anastasia?

[This message has been edited by Tempest (11-28-2006 09:15 PM).]

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2006-11-29 12:16 PM

i liked this, i can acually relate to this well. the ending though need a better structure i think. but thats just my advice...
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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