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frail
Junior Member

since 2008-05-04

Posts 12

0 posted 2008-12-11 03:02 AM

Unexplainable things,
Unspoken feelings.
Giving me new reason to Live,
And another hope to believe.

If I could just kiss those lips,
Touch you with my fingertips.
And if I could of hold you forever,
I promise to be your eternal lover.

When I thought it was Love's violent death,
You thickened the air so I could breath.
You drag the past without bringing tears,
Instead assurance for all my fears.

I Love you with certainty,
I hope you stay for eternity.
Even if I don't know where this would Lead,
'cause I am most willing to bleed. ..

KandyGrl511
Member

since 2008-11-30

Posts 52
Michigan

1 posted 2008-12-23 08:48 PM

wow that is really meaningful but i loved it~!?!~

VampireWifey
New Member

since 2008-11-24

Posts 8
Albany,NY

2 posted 2009-01-02 09:43 PM

i loved this poem it was really good i like the part when you wrote loves a violent death.

VampireWifey
New Member

since 2008-11-24

Posts 8
Albany,NY

3 posted 2009-01-02 09:44 PM

ooops i meant loves violent death sry lol

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

4 posted 2009-01-03 07:41 PM

nice write. it was really good.

beautyincalvary
Member

since 2006-07-13

Posts 98

5 posted 2009-01-08 12:50 PM

I like the dark imagery, especially the blood in your last line.

Marc-Andre
Senior Member

since 2008-12-07

Posts 501

6 posted 2009-01-08 03:19 AM

Even if I don't know where this would Lead,
'cause I am most willing to bleed. ..

I like the ending couplet. Mark

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

7 posted 2009-01-09 01:29 AM

Very nice writing. You twisted the words so that they sound loving on the surface, yet they retain a chilling edge.
Library.

There is power in the pen.

frail
Junior Member

since 2008-05-04

Posts 12

8 posted 2009-01-13 08:15 PM

Hehehehe! Guys! Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. This was actually for a very important person in my life, I fell in love with that dude but he has never seen this. I'm too shy, he'll know it's for him.

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