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young_blood
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0 posted 2008-12-07 08:16 PM


My right leg still jitters a bit,
I wish it would stop that.
More of a twitch than habit
that I can't catch.
Fingers locked,
reason blocked,
I hope my eyes stay closed.

My right eye still sees some color
I wish it would enhance it.
My foot continues to tap the floor
as my cigarette stays lit.
Fingers locked,
smile cocked,
I hope I stay secluded.

My right hand slips to my ear
to rock my head slowly,
Chaos makes sense when so near
but makes me feel lonely.
Smile cocked,
ipod docked,
Bags' Groove (Take 2).

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RevengeIsMine
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1 posted 2008-12-08 06:48 PM


Can't belive there's been no comments... Brilliant as per usual!!!
freeand2sexy
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2 posted 2008-12-08 07:42 PM


Wow, Great poem!!!

I love pancakes!!!

young_blood
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3 posted 2008-12-08 11:05 PM


I'm glad you guys enjoyed it. I really really struggled with this. The main reason was that I was actually trying to write about a subject. I was forcing words out. Blah. Anyway, thanks.
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4 posted 2008-12-09 12:38 PM


I always enjoy your poems.. the images blow me away
Krysti

Taylor See
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5 posted 2008-12-16 02:10 PM


Love your poems. The balance of imagery, and that left to the imagination, is wonderful. I love the flow of the poem too =)

Great work

And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall
They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all

young_blood
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6 posted 2009-01-07 08:37 AM


I'm waiting for the day when you guys don't like something I write. Haha. Thank you all for the encouragement.
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