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AcousticPen
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since 2008-12-01
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0 posted 2008-12-01 03:51 AM




When I need an outlet I grab this pen
Because it’s easier than an ear
Although I wish someone cared
I have nobody near

My heart is full and needs to vent
So here I can let it out
No more bottled feelings
No insides that scream and shout

My wounds, they can’t heal
But not fatal, I will live
My trouble is that what I get
Is not nearly what I give

I try, and try, and try my best
And give until I’ve one thing left
When I’m down to just my sanity
The one I crave commits the theft

Lured in by every attribute
From best to worst she ends in better
Than what any other girl has to offer
She could be anything if she herself would let her

The problem is not this person
But rather lies with me
I have to live without the perfection
That no one else can see

My suffering is because I care
Because I make myself have to be
Not whatever she may want
But everything she needs

-Scott Vukelic

© Copyright 2008 Scott Vukelic - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2008-12-01 08:54 AM


Welcome to Pip Scott!

Vent, get it all out and share with us.

Please check your email for a special greeting!

Ri
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Posts 67
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2 posted 2008-12-01 09:37 AM


This is excellent, especially for a first post. The first stanza made me consider this myself, and i came to the conclusion that it isn't that people don't care, but writing appeals more because it doesn't offer judgement.
A great style and flows easily

freeand2sexy
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3 posted 2008-12-01 07:38 PM


Awesome first post, can't wait to read more!!!

I love pancakes!!!

Falling rain
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4 posted 2008-12-01 08:52 PM


Amazing stuff you got here dude!

Keep up the writing! I'll be looking foreword to more like this.. lol

-Zach

I'D RATHER BE ANYTHING BUT ORDINARY!!!! XP

rhia_5779
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5 posted 2008-12-01 10:15 PM


I really liked this stanza and the first one btw!
My wounds, they can’t heal
But not fatal, I will live
My trouble is that what I get
Is not nearly what I give

I loved this stanza- it just totally fit together and was so well written! Nice first post! Welcome to PIp! NIce write!
Rhia

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6 posted 2008-12-01 11:16 PM


Scott, Welcome To Passions. It's great to have you here and see your kind replies to the poems.

As for your poem.. I loved it.. and you couldnt find a better place to vent PIP is the best place for that. here you are among friends(I think i stole that line from a boston pizza commercial tho) but i mean it.. Hope you write more soon. I would love to read the next piece.
Krysti

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