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Beautifully Broken (GOD I HATE YOU RIGHT NOW)
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Beautifully Broken (GOD I HATE YOU RIGHT NOW) |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia 
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This is my way of venting... My fiance or whatever he likes too call himselves these days is stressing me atm. The baby is due in a few months n i'm totally torn... Anyhow on the mark of our 1 year anniversy of us being together his ex gf (of 2 years) lands on our doorstep in the pouring rain sooking cause she has nothing.. so of ALL things he could do HE OFFERS HER A PLACE TOO STAY! She has made things quite clear too me and my mum she wants him back and has walked in on him several times in the shower etc.. so maybe i'm jealous but i've tried teling him how i feel and he doesn't listen.. it's like he doesn't know me anymore..  Oh n since like nobody replies on my poems these days (Luv u Keagan n Zach) i decided to start adding images too my poems... don't know if this one fits.. but thanks too my gorgeous cousin for posing in this picture.. ___________________________________________________ Beautifully Broken  Tell me why you’re not listening To a single word I’ve said Why the hell did you leave me here alone Whilst you carried her too bed Then tell me why the tears I cry Fall down my cheeks each night Then tell me why my broken heart Is still bleeding out in fright So why am I not good enough? God tell me what I’ve done Did I breakdown too long ago Did we stop having all the fun! Is it because I’m pregnant Or is it because we’re through Either way I’m tired now I’m sick of crying over you So now tell me why I’m so messed up And why you only stop too say hello Then tell me why i fell apart last week And why you didn’t even know _______________________________ The pictures line the hallway Memories of what we used to be I left the engagement ring on the counter Is this it for you and me? |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Honey I feel sooo bad for you and If i had enough money I'd buy a plane ticket to come give you a huge hug and kick your fiance's butt.. lol This poem was beautifully written like usual. And oh hone.. I feel so bad... Hope thing get better!! -HUG!- -Zach I'D RATHER BE ANYTHING BUT ORDINARY!!!! XP |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
Do you know what im doing right now? I am giving you the biggest hug i possibly can without hurting you or ur baby lol. I don't know what i would do if i were you but be strong and keep trying. luv ya hun. {~~*~~} Miss.Emmalee |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Wow this is amazing and really full of emotion! Powerful write! |
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ruskins Junior Member
since 2008-11-27
Posts 15 |
how did your fiance react when slut-bag walked in on him in the shower? If he didn't freak out and tell her to get out... leave him, cause he's going to cause you a lot of pain. hope you get through this without to much grief. loved the poem btw. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
I normally don't enjoy rhyming poetry, yet this one caught my attention, and after a couple of more reads, I decided that I might possibly be wrong. A typical good job by one of our more talented teens. What would you attempt to do...if you knew you could not fail?. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Jess you are way to amazing and talented to be treated like that... i hope you follow your head and your heart and find the right path to take. love always Krysti |
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I am the arch angel Member
since 2008-02-02
Posts 167nowhere,illinois,USA |
i can relate with you, when the ex's come to haunt you.....it sucks.... just thump him on the head a couple of times  and zach, you won't kick nobodys butt........hell i can take you..you'll just give her a hug...... and jess, i do to reply to them.... beautifully written... keep doing what you do best, much lovekeagan |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Ehh true enough Keagan.. And if it weren't you being like a freakin huge and me being a pacifist then I wouldn't kick his butt. But any who.. Great poem Jess. Hope things get better. -Zach I'D RATHER BE ANYTHING BUT ORDINARY!!!! XP |
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angelfacegurl Member
since 2008-04-17
Posts 67Swartz Creek, MI |
im so sorry but this poem is perfect! |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
aww...this is so sad. i really hope things have gotten better. you have a beautiful baby and i'm praying things will be all together, awesome, in the long run. great write and fitted together so amazingly well!! .:~]Julianna[~:. |
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