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Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

0 posted 2006-10-31 09:07 PM

im just a wanna be
someone that every one knows
that one guy
thats always at the show

up on stage
and playing out his soul
singing his song
thats out of control

the crowds would stretch
to endless limits
i would be the guy
telling everyone theres something in it

the only one
with a rockers core
as true and blue
as the ancient lore

when i play
i feel alive
i feel so good
like i cant die

god, what i wouldnt give.....
to be that guy

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

1 posted 2006-11-12 06:00 PM

omg....I L-O-V-E this poem. it was soooo awesome. I loved the way you described the crowd..and your playing...

THis was GREAT!!!
  keep it up!
     toodles,
        Pen

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

2 posted 2006-11-13 01:28 PM

Outstanding ending!!!! Just my current mood, its is so wow, blew me away. I say that too much. But its soo true. I can relate in a sense right now soo much.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2006-11-14 12:22 PM

very nice had a good flow
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

The Shadow in Blue
Member

since 2006-05-18

Posts 493
EL, Michigan

4 posted 2006-11-24 04:22 PM

I liked the comparison with a rock star/musician in his element/on stage to everyday people. It's like you want to showcase who you are and what you can do, but are too scared to actually do it.
Is that the message you were trying to convey?

Anyways, nice simple flow and a very enjoyable post.

(Hope you had a good turkey day Tempest- got to love family.)

^_^
~Jill

pencil&paper
Member

since 2006-09-09

Posts 76
asleep somewhere in my head

5 posted 2006-11-29 08:10 PM

great poem i really liked the ending though

"Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music."~Angela Monet

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

6 posted 2007-06-24 01:49 PM

boosting.

River Of Tears
Junior Member

since 2006-10-28

Posts 25
Canada!

7 posted 2007-06-25 10:52 AM

Really great poem - not that all your others aren't great too! I cant explain why I like this so much, but it just really... eye opening to me.

Keep writing, because if you were to ever stop it would be tragic.

Shay*

Jezzika
Member

since 2005-01-05

Posts 154
work

8 posted 2007-06-25 12:04 PM

The whole thing was so awesome!!
straight up.....I loved it

One trillion dollars could buy a heart a soul ~ Anti-Flag

therewegoagain
New Member

since 2008-05-15

Posts 3

9 posted 2008-05-15 10:44 PM

I am a big fan of your writing. You are able, as a poet, to switch your writing forms from abab, to aabb, and still make it flow and sound great, which is difficult. You are very talented and I think you should deffinatly persue this further.

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