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Rattlin' Bones! (Another Writers Class Assignment)
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Rattlin' Bones! (Another Writers Class Assignment) |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia 
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Hiya Guys!, More writers class assigments, since i've had to finish working i've kinda put more effort into my classes. Okay so the other night we were asked to write a piece that focused on abuse. Now for me there was a million things i could write about but the tricky part was we had to listen to a song and somehow make the poem completely different to the lyrics but yet some how include the title and the main focus point. So i gets my song, and it's from some chick i'd never even heard of before.. Anyway after listening to it on repeat for about 40 times i came up with this. __________________________________________ Rattlin' Bones When I was just a little girl Of Maybe two or three You started being a bad daddy Started doing things to me It started with some swearing Then a bruise here and their Then it got really ugly And each time you didn’t care You didn’t hurt me all the time But when you did it made me sad You left a stone by my bed Every time you did something bad Now I’m all grown up daddy And you’re old and even gray So I came back to visit you I’ve got to be strong today You were sitting at the kitchen table Mum was making tea Then I handed you the stones and said “You gave these to me!” They were packed up in a garbage bag Far too many to count Daddy’s eyes split down the middle He couldn’t believe the amount You told me one day I’d want to leave Escape from a life so black But the truth is daddy All these stones hurt my back These stones remind me of the past And how I’ll never be like you I left them at home once daddy And I almost hurt somebody too I don’t wanna be like you dad So I’ll drag this bag of stones Until they bury me in the ground With all the dust and rattlin’ bones Oh BTW the song.. Kassey Chambers - Rattlin' Bones! And the foucus point i had to keep was Stones |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Wow!! You better get an A++ or else I'm flying down there and showing that instructor of yours a thing or too! lol Cause this poem is amazing! It made me realize a lot in my life and in what I have to do to move on from my experiences. "These stones remind me of the past And how I’ll never be like you I left them at home once daddy And I almost hurt somebody too I don’t wanna be like you dad So I’ll drag this bag of stones Until they bury me in the ground With all the dust and rattlin’ bones" Amazing work hun. Keep up the work and if your instructor tells you any different then give me a call. I'll be there in no time. :P -Zach "I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!" |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
I have to agree totally Amazing!!! "Life is too confusing, but I like it that way!" |
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Leanne <3 Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216N.S.W, Australia |
this was just unreal enjoyed every minute of reading it!! |
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