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Teen Poetry #8

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Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2008-10-12 02:35 PM

lets cross these rusty bridges
and throw rocks from the overpass
its only three A.M.
and you know this night won't last
we can drive to nowhere
just to see where we won't go
we can stay under the stars tonight
and maybe call them home

more to come soon.

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

1 posted 2008-10-12 03:05 PM

Very nice my friend...I am once again in awe of your talent! Ladies and gents introducing the next A. Pope!

OH SHUT UP SHUT UP AND GIVE SOMEONE ELSE A CHANCE!!!!

BeyaK
Member

since 2008-08-07

Posts 126
Philippines

2 posted 2008-10-13 04:07 AM

i think it's great and i'm looking forward for this one to be finished... :-)

~~*K. B.*~~

Taylor See
Member

since 2008-10-07

Posts 55
North Carolina, US

3 posted 2008-10-13 02:56 PM

I really like this one, it calls up some of my own memories with friends. The flow of the poem is also very well done and doesn't feel clunky like poems can sometimes.

Hoping for more,

Taylor

And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall
They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all

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