Stand up - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Belinda
Member

since 2006-01-30

Posts 126
UK

0 posted 2006-10-31 06:58 AM

I'm here and making a change,
No more falling to the ground.
I'm going to stand up for myself,
No longer shall I make no sound.

If you don't like me, that's okay.
If you think I'm ugly, look away.
If I talk rubbish, close your ears.
If my style scares you, face your fears.

Sick of all these stereotypes,
I want only to be free,
Sick of living to fit in,
I just want to be me..

If If you hate me, I don't care.
If my hair's blinding, try not to stare.
If I smell bad, turn around,
If my shoes suck, why look at the ground?

To all you looser's,
Who want a constant fight.
Get over yourselves,
and take a hike !

Belinda
Member

since 2006-01-30

Posts 126
UK

1 posted 2006-10-31 07:45 AM

repeated word !! sowi hehe

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

2 posted 2006-10-31 05:04 PM

No longer shall I make no sound.

Here I think this should change, it sounds bad with a double negative. Reconfigure that a bit.

Loved these

If you don't like me, that's okay.
If you think I'm ugly, look away.
If I talk rubbish, close your ears.
If my style scares you, face your fears.

Sick of all these stereotypes,
I want only to be free,
Sick of living to fit in,
I just want to be me..

If If you hate me, I don't care.
If my hair's blinding, try not to stare.
If I smell bad, turn around,
If my shoes suck, why look at the ground?

To all you looser's,
Who want a constant fight.
Get over yourselves,
and take a hike !

******** Says it all, amazing piece of work.
Also, the end of it, nice finished ending but the end the rhyming was kinda off.

Belinda
Member

since 2006-01-30

Posts 126
UK

3 posted 2006-11-01 08:27 AM

Yeah, I think you're right I'll try to change that .. any suggestions.. anyone?

Thank you! xD

Yup I think I should change that, doesn't quite sound right.

Belinda~x

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2006-11-06 11:16 PM

very nice flow, and understood this well

hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

5 posted 2006-11-08 09:14 PM

loved it!

Belinda
Member

since 2006-01-30

Posts 126
UK

6 posted 2006-11-22 06:19 PM

thanks.it was an interesting poem for me to write with a new subject. It's about bullying but I have never personally been bullied however I have a few friends who have been bullied in the past and it's always hard to beat the bullies, but I have helped a cuple of my friends. So this might not be your thing .. but yeah!

Belinda~x

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.