Seeing the light, just to fall into darkness..

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Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2008-10-05 12:40 PM

Hey guys this poem is a little too long. And the ending stanza isn't my best. But oh well. It'll have to do. Thanks for reading!
-Zach
Your arms held me together.
When I wanted to fall apart.
Little did you know.
You stole me heart.

Your words mended up the wound.
Your smile kept the ghost's away.
I left my heart out on my sleeves.
You always knew the right words to say.

You kept me from insanity.
Sheltered me from the rain.
Hold on to me tight love.
I don't want to feel this pain.

You saw that I was vulnerable
And you protected me from it all.
You were always close.
I only needed to call.

But then came a day
when you didn't answer your phone
Came over to see if you were alright.
But I saw what I should of known.

You were with him.
Closer then can be.
You said that you could explain.
But I got the idea through what I see.

Fooling around with him.
While your seeing me..
Was I so blind?
Did you really care for me?

Hurting and scorned.
Don't need your apologies and goodbye.
You stole me heart.
All along you told the lie.

I thought you really cared.
But I guess I wasn't enough.
Wasn't the type of guy you liked.
This time I can't be so tough.

You build me up.
To break me apart
I guess its time..
That we just depart.

So good bye for now.
I wasted too much time on you.
I'll let you be happy
With the guy you wanna screw.

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

1 posted 2008-10-05 08:30 PM

This was a really good poem zach. I can tell how your feeling more open about being bi and everything...your very brave. Great write and it could work for anyone, talk to you later!!!

~*Julianna*~

"Somewhere under the rainbow...there will be thunderstorms."

BeyaK
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since 2008-08-07

Posts 126
Philippines

2 posted 2008-10-05 11:31 PM

really a good one...i agree. :-)

~~*K. B.*~~

freeand2sexy
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since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

3 posted 2008-10-05 11:43 PM

When i read your poems, its like a window into your emotions. Great poem!

Live in the present but don't forget the future

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2008-10-06 08:30 AM

Uhmm Julianna.. This poem wasn't about being bi.. It was about a girl cheating on a guy (me being that guy) and having the guy have to live with her choice.. But thanks for reading!

-Zach

"I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!"

Taylor See
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since 2008-10-07

Posts 55
North Carolina, US

5 posted 2008-10-07 02:53 PM

Great poem. It definitely felt like it came from the heart.

The one thing I noticed was that in the first and 8th(?) stanza when you said
"stole my heart" you wrote "stole me heart"

I don't know if it was intentional or not,since you did it twice.

Either way, good job!

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

6 posted 2008-10-09 08:06 PM

lol thanks for pointing that out..

it was accidentally..

A typo or what ever you want to call it. lol

Thanks for reading!

-Zach

"I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!"

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