Teen Poetry #8 |
The Joke's On Me |
Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
Shock! Horror! It doesn't rhyme! Enjoy! The Joke's On Me Laugh, just laugh Laugh like it's not true Be nothing else Nothing else but you Take it as it comes Smile though your heart Is aching, breaking Laugh, just laugh The joke's on me, The joke's on you When you trip, fall Get up and Laugh, just laugh You are free as. You can be no other Than your simple self So why not just Do as you want Dance as you want Be who you want This is yours And only yours So do as you please Say what you please Just laugh, laugh Laugh like it's not true Be nothing else Nobody else but you. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
It's awesome!!!!!! I liked it alot!!!!!! It made me laugh, what a shock Live in the present but don't forget the future |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
It's realy great.. I love it.. Well done! |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Wonderful. I understand what you're talking about and I hope you're OK. |
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Taylor See Member
since 2008-10-07
Posts 55North Carolina, US |
I loved this poem! Amazing, amazing. Who cares if it rhymes? It's great on its own. My absolute favorite lines: Laugh, just laugh You are free as. You can be : no other Than your simple self I loved how you used "you can be" in two different sentences. Like they blended. Sorta like: "You are free as You can be " + "You can be no other Than your simple self" Very cool! Keep it up! And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
This is really good! I liked it and I hope your doing better. Great work! -Zach "I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!" |
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Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
Awh, thanks guys. Maybe i should write non-rhyming poems more often. |
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BeyaK Member
since 2008-08-07
Posts 126Philippines |
this is a great write... i enjoyed it and it isn't that bad... nice one! ~~*K. B.*~~ |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
honestly, there was nothing remarkable about this, but somehow it made me smile. something about it was...ironic? mischievous? it reminds me of the first time i heard bright eyes...hmmm...thank you for brightening my day a little more. |
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