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Melting Candles, Dry Wax Tears (re-mastered!!!)
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Melting Candles, Dry Wax Tears (re-mastered!!!) |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN 
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something doesnt feel right i can taste it in the air these numbers dont add up and no one seams to care that ive fallen into slumber and ill never wake again encased here with closed eyes sewn together with my sin a single red wax candle in my entire source of light sitting on the mantle it leads me blind of sight and the pistol on the nightstand is right within my reach this crimson war takes lives and im just a casualty ive fallen vitom to this conflict and i wish i never was im finished with the bloodshed its over with and done the candle is growing low the flame flickers as it dies and i feel like a failer because that candle was my life |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Wow. Bryan you are a genius. Your use of metaphor is unparalleled. You know you can talk to me if you need to right?  Don't believe Everything you Think |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
OMFG loved the original.. SPEECHLESS BY THAT>.. And i'm here to chat if u ever would like to.. |
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Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
Wow. Stunning. That really was an amazing piece of poetry. |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
your all soooo great! i love you guys. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Wow.. this is just simply amazing Bryan! I love the story line and your words.. Very well done... 2 golds stars for you!!.. lol!! "Only in darkness can we see the stars. |
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