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Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

0 posted 2006-10-29 09:13 PM

saying sorry doesnt make it right.
its not going to take away all the fights.
who gave you permission,
to take controll of my life?!

you have changed for the wrong reasons,
and you expect me to deal with the treason?!
i can feel it in every breath i breath in
ive had enough and now im leavin'!

those tears are fake,
i know you really dont care.
i know that your a fraud of life,
and your telling me its unfair?

sustaining fears
that are long overdue,
your a living fake,
and you know its the truth.

live life to live,
dont look back.
breath every breath,
like its your last.

so you tell me,
is saying sorry is really worth the effort?
you tell me,
do you really think it will make it better?

This is the only life you have, so live it to be remembered

forever*wishing
Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 178
where my heart is

1 posted 2006-10-29 09:51 PM

wow.
i really liked this, good flow, rhythym, and everything...it was good = )

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

2 posted 2006-10-29 09:52 PM

mmmm i really like this. idk how to really comment.
i just like it : )

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2006-10-30 12:20 PM

very nice write hope to read more soon...
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

4 posted 2006-10-30 03:47 AM

My Crazy Little poet did it again!

Tempest, You take the words outta my mouth everytime u write.. Geez, Dont u dare give up writing Will ya, Or I'll find ya, and i promise it wont be plesent

Lost Between The World Of Fun and Reality..

Belinda
Member

since 2006-01-30

Posts 126
UK

5 posted 2006-10-30 11:30 AM

Rather impressive I must say

One of my favourites..definatley going in my library !! well done!!

Look Forward to reading more

Belinda~x

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

6 posted 2007-06-24 02:01 PM

your the best ever....EVER.

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

7 posted 2007-06-26 07:17 PM

wow nice flow and grate structure this poem is one of your bests i would have to say i can't wait to hear more from you

Gifted
Member

since 2007-06-26

Posts 140
Caribbean

8 posted 2007-06-26 07:50 PM

I guess on this board capitalization doesn't matter. Oh well. You need to check your spelling though. Otherwise it was a nice poem. Although, some words just seemed to be there because they rhymed.

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