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hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2008-08-11 04:06 PM

I fell in love with you
you were always on my mind
we had the kind of love
some would be lucky to find

But it's been awhile since you called
and I dont know what to do
I always hoped you wouldnt leave
but I guess deep inside I knew

now all I hear are love songs
and people speaking your name
i'm trapped inside the torture
of my hearts silly game

those quiet nights
our midnight walks
getting lost
in never ending talks

it kills me to know
that i was wrong
don't make me hear
another love song

ahh so i tried but... i dont know I just can't write anymore...

lilshortcake
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since 2008-08-11

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1 posted 2008-08-11 07:58 PM

That was a pretty poem (oh yeah I used alliteration

)! Was it inspired from a break up? Any way I won't be nosey. Keep writing.

from- the newbe Tammy.

Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

2 posted 2008-08-12 02:01 AM

Lol... I'm sorry... I'm delirious right now... If this post sounds weird, just delete it!

Anyway, this poem didn't particularly stand out today (maybe it will tomorrow). I just don't know why, but that spark your poems usually have isn't completely there.

Oh well, I'll post again when I'm thinking straight!

There is power in the pen.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2008-08-12 03:29 AM

ahh Andrew thanks for reading and responding I know what you mean and I felt that way to.. like I had all these things I wanted to say but then when it got to writing the poem i couldnt do it..

Tammy thank you for your reply good to have you heer at Passions. well it wasnt really a break up cos we weren't classified as dating but.. it was like one of those serios relationships that happen too fast and just... end... sorta..
Krysti

BeyaK
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since 2008-08-07

Posts 126
Philippines

4 posted 2008-08-12 12:48 PM

it's really not a nice feeling to be broken hearted and in some silly way, you're drowned with love songs on the radio... : )

~~*Kaye B.*~~

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

5 posted 2008-08-12 01:49 PM

that was a really great poem. haven't read much of your's, will do so now. lol, great write, keep it up and i'll be watching.

~*Julianna*~

"You don't know me...but I know you. That's all that matters right now... Mr.Rainey!" - Secret Window

Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

6 posted 2008-08-13 01:27 AM

Hey! I'm back! Anyway, I read through again, and I've decided to revise my opinion. Your poem was simple and very honest. It didn't particularly stand out, but it had a very humble tone. I guess it really was good after all. (That came out wrong...) ^^

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