Teen Poetry #8 |
The Bitter Taste of Broken Memories |
XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
{# I'm going to add more, I just can't seem to think of the next line at the momment. The weight of all this sorrow, It drags tears down me face. Lies of love and happy endings, It's left my heart in a twisted shape. There's nothing like abandonment, nothing worse than lies. There's nothing more repulsive than the tears it's made me cry. Shimmering in the moonlight; surppressing what's been left, a heart that once was whole but now is a broken mess. Pieces are missing and there's holes right through, they grow even larger when I focus hard on you. Daddy why'd you leave me? I can't stay this strong. Daddy don't you remember? Remember why you wrote me that song? I can't recall the day you left though it wasn't that long ago, Daddy why didn't stay? I didn't want you to go. {~~*~~} "You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans....#} |
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Love_Skull Junior Member
since 2008-07-15
Posts 44 |
wow, thats really deep. i really liked it.i hope it gets better for you. ~Leah |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
OMG emi u made me cry. this hit home so very well.. i'm so proud of u em.. the title blew me away too... So proud em! |
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BeyaK Member
since 2008-08-07
Posts 126Philippines |
it's such a touching piece... nice job. ~~*Kaye B.*~~ |
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Gasken Junior Member
since 2008-07-12
Posts 20Cebu, Philippines |
Good job dude.. I really like it.. Hope to read more poems from you.. (--,) |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
Sorry Jess, didn't mean to make you cry. As for the title all I had to do was think of something you might use. Thanks to all of you who have read this. {~~*~~} "You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans....#} |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Wow.. whatta refreshing read after being gone for so long?..This is amazing Tori! Frankly I like it the way it is.. Great work and keep on writing! "Only in darkness can we see the stars. |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
em, i'm always praying for you, wishing everything would go back to the way it was before. this was so emotional i don't know if you'll believe me right now...but i'm crying for your "loss". keep holding in there, and when you need that shoulder to cry on, just come climb in through my big window. love you so much em...talk to you soon. <3<3 (: ~*Julianna*~ |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
seriously amazing. this is most def goin in my library. |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
Thank you. I don't thinks it's amazing but whatever floats your boat. Thanks for reading. {~~*~~} "You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans....#} |
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