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Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

0 posted 2008-08-01 06:30 PM

Two Birds ate at a morcel
Two Flies faught over dung
I know not my quarrel
With the bee by whom I'm stung

The two Birds are a fighting
Beating beak upon the ground
The two Flies are a fighting
O'r some dung which they had found

And the beautiful Bee
My golden friend is dead
A moment to long,
I should have fled

Two Birds ate at a morcel
Two Flies faught over dung
I know too well my quarrel
With my friend by whom I'm stung

Be who you are
And say what you feel
'Cause those who mind don't matter
And those who matter don't mind
-Dr Suess

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

1 posted 2008-08-01 07:28 PM

aww is this about Amanda? I'm so sorry. Who ever it is. Hope that the fight isn't long, they're never fun.

-Kate

"Lucy: I think you are the most selfish person on the planet. George: Well that's just silly. Have you met everyone on the planet?"

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

2 posted 2008-08-06 06:56 PM

Interesting metaphor, but flawless all the same.

{~~*~~}

"You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans!...'cuase dat's just how I roll.."
{~Emily~}

Belinda
Member

since 2006-01-30

Posts 126
UK

3 posted 2008-08-06 07:51 PM

"I know too well my quarrel
With my friend by whom I'm stung"

my favourite part.
a very good write, loved you use of language

Belinda~*

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

Gasken
Junior Member

since 2008-07-12

Posts 20
Cebu, Philippines

4 posted 2008-08-08 09:46 PM

Great Metaphor you had in your poem.. Hope to read more poems from you.. (--,)

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

5 posted 2008-08-11 03:30 AM

such a strong and stable metaphor.,. you always come up with the best one

hope you feel better..
Krysti

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

6 posted 2008-08-11 03:31 PM

Thanks guys. This was actualy about an arguement, I sort of over heard between my aunt and cousin. It was all in whispered tones and thats all I caught but it was angry and it went on for hours.

It made ME angry, particularly since I knew after the first ten minutes it would go no where.

I vented onto a peice of paper and buried it in metaphor.

Be who you are
And say what you feel
'Cause those who mind don't matter
And those who matter don't mind
-Dr Suess

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

7 posted 2008-08-12 06:36 PM

this is stunning. i love the metaphore. great write.

~*Julianna*~

"You don't know me...but I know you. That's all that matters right now... Mr.Rainey!" - Secret Window

BeyaK
Member

since 2008-08-07

Posts 126
Philippines

8 posted 2008-08-13 03:17 PM

love the metaphor on this one... hope to read more from you...

~~*Kaye B.*~~

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