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RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2008-07-23 11:25 PM

Okay Guys here's another new type of writing from me lol.. and considering my last one sucked this one prob will as well anyway..

A Knights Tale...
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You stand and shake as you fear me
After all this ends with a knife
The love I had for you vanished
The moment you risked my life

You stand but you’ll fight for survival
After all you won’t let me win
You didn’t come this far for nothing
As the battle of love begins

My sword, it cuts through armour
As you take a dagger right to the heart
Now you know how it felt
The night you tore me apart

You stand but you look pale
You’re far too frail to fight
You fall as your heart stops beating
I killed a man tonight

Oh god I deserve this all now
As revenge rushes through my brain
But my voice is as lonely as loud
As I whisper the joy of this pain

Our love won’t be lost forever
After all this has gone on too long
And as I stand to face this mirror
Our portrait appears to be gone

This war will stop when it rains
And a path will guide me from here
As my pain slowly melts away
The world I once knew disappears

I awake once again from a dream
My face all clammy and pale
The revengeful answers that we seek
Belong only in a knight’s tale

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

1 posted 2008-07-24 04:34 PM

Well I really liked this, and i think it's true. Great write.

{~~*~~}

"You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans!...'cuase dat's just how I roll.."
{~Emily~}

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

2 posted 2008-07-26 11:23 PM

Jeez! Where do I start?
First of all, you're right, this WAS really different. This was so good, it's getting a special little spot in my library!
Okay... There were a few grammatical problems, but that's fine.

Good job!!!!!!

There is power in the pen.

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

3 posted 2008-07-28 09:10 PM

"I awake once again from a dream
My face all clammy and pale
The revengeful answers that we seek
Belong only in a knight’s tale"

Well, think what you'd like but i thought it was really good. Oh, and that was my favorite stanza.

If you love someone, let them go. If they come back, they were always yours. If they don't, they never were.

Octave
Member

since 2008-07-29

Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.

4 posted 2008-07-29 02:57 PM

I really liked it. It's very nicely put together. You got some really nice stuff in there. =]

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