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The Sweet Decadence Of Time
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The Sweet Decadence Of Time |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia 
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Heya Guys, Something new from me. Well really its an experiment but yea. Tell me what you think!! _________________________________________________ The Sweet Decadence Of Time Written away in the pages You’ll be just another mystery You may have been the greatest But you won’t go down in history You may not be alive But you’re sure as hell not dead You may not be a ghost But you linger in my head The shadows re-create you With every direction of the sun You’re running to stand still You’re like a cowboy with a gun You’re the essence of eternal life Without you we can’t exist You’re the guardian of the keepers And we just can’t resist As the clock strikes twelve And the mouse runs down The emperor of time Just reclaimed her crown |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
nice. its something diffrent from you anyways. |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
I loved it alot. The way you can ryhm makes me feel jelous, I can never ryhm. I love the last stanza especially, the way you tied in part of a nursery ryhm into your own poem. Great job. Library. ~*Julianna*~ |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Different can be good. nice write. ~Zach~ "And so the lion fell in love with the lamb....,"he murmured. "What a stupid lamb," I sighed. "What a sick, masochistic lion." |
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HersheyKiss Member
since 2008-06-02
Posts 137New Jersey |
I really like it. Something new doesn't always mean bad. |
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