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Teen Poetry #8

Melody of Sorrow.

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2008-07-14 11:52 AM

Living in silent torment...
Living in the lifeless corpes of what I use to be.
Captured in your web of lies.
Wishing to be once set free.

Captavating words.
Keep me close to home.
Sorrounded by people.
Yet feels all alone..

The love I use to share
is once long gone away
I felt comfort when you were once near
But I had to run away; to not let myself stay.

Let alone to pick up the shards
and put them under lock and key.
Don't want to end up like the corpes I am now.
I let myself be vulnerable but didn't open my eyes to see.

That I was wrong, that I messed up.
Sure my mask always seem content.
But open your eyes..
I'm under this silent torment...

Save me from today..
And hide me from tomarrow...
Please save me from this sad song..
This melody of sorrow.

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

1 posted 2008-07-14 02:03 PM

Save me from today..
And hide me from tomarrow...
Please save me from this sad song..
This melody of sorrow.

very nice ending i liked it alot.

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

2 posted 2008-07-14 05:07 PM

I second CO's motion! A wonderful job.

Be who you are
And say what you feel
'Cause those who mind don't matter
And those who matter don't mind
-Dr Suess

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

3 posted 2008-07-14 07:11 PM

that last stanza was my favorite. i liked it a lot.

-Kate

"Lucy: I think you are the most selfish person on the planet. George: Well that's just silly. Have you met everyone on the planet?"

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2008-07-15 01:57 PM

Thanks guys..

Yeah I like the last stanza.. i think its the best thing that i ever wrote.. hahaha

~Zach~

"And so the lion fell in love with the lamb....,"he murmured. "What a stupid lamb," I sighed. "What a sick, masochistic lion."

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