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Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2008-07-11 11:18 AM

a heart of remorse writes this story
and my pain is the ink
its like im starved of oxygen
and i cant even think
what to put down on this paper
what to tell you in this note
written from the depths of me
this is what you should know

id never leave you hanging
unless you begged to cut the cord
tell me that its useless
and i will make you sore
but tell me that its too much
and i will be your wings
and fly you away from here
to bigger and better things

but please just dont forget me
in the future when im gone
just please remember my face
the one that loved you for so long

a heart of remorse is breaking
and im the only one that knows
im dying on the inside
while the pain continues to grow

[This message has been edited by Clockwork_Orange (07-11-2008 12:12 PM).]

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

1 posted 2008-07-11 01:40 PM

"a heart of remorse is breaking
and im the only one that knows
im dying on the inside
while the pain continues to grow"

Aw this is sad...i like it

If you love someone, let them go. If they come back, they were always yours. If they don't, they never were.

Idontmindyouundermyskin
Junior Member

since 2007-01-29

Posts 32

2 posted 2008-07-12 05:07 AM

Read one of your pieces and came back for more.

There's a lot of voice in your work, and it's so well contained.

I like them both.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

3 posted 2008-07-12 10:40 AM

you just amaze me. just amaze me. wow.

-Kate

"Lucy: I think you are the most selfish person on the planet. George: Well that's just silly. Have you met everyone on the planet?"

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

4 posted 2008-07-12 12:05 PM

This has a certain voice to it, wanting to be heard. It's amazing how the words flow into my heart and feel for you. Great write.

~*Julianna*~

"This lullaby is only a few words
A simple run of chords
Quiet here in this spare room
But only you can hear it, hear it..."
-Sara

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

5 posted 2008-07-13 12:51 PM

"My pain is the ink" That line is beautiful. There have been so many times when I've written what I felt. Good one!

There is power in the pen.

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