YOURE DRIVING WAY TOO FAST

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Teen Poetry #8

YOURE DRIVING WAY TOO FAST

Tripp'ncutie
Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 73
minnasota

0 posted 2008-07-03 06:44 PM

i am spinning
in a circle of emotion
one second you love me
the next you are in reverse

why are you driving so fast
i am spinning in reverse
wait that is you
in a circle of emotion

one second you love me
the next you are in reverse

quit driving so crazy
you are loosing me
spinning in circles
emotions gone crazy

are you here
are you gone
are you there
where are you

one second you love me
the next you are in reverse

confusion
hallucination
misunderstanding
and reversed emotion

you have got me spinning
in circles of emotion
quit pulling the gears
and make your decision

[This message has been edited by Tripp'ncutie (07-04-2008 02:26 AM).]

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-07-04 09:16 AM

Wow how many times have I been in your situation.. Yes it can get confusing but try to keep a steaddy head.. great write!

~Zach~

"And so the lion fell in love with the lamb....,"he murmured. "What a stupid lamb," I sighed. "What a sick, masochistic lion."

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

2 posted 2008-07-11 02:48 PM

i felt there was no misunderstanding in the meaning of the poem, yet it was not your best, and still i enjoyed it very much, thanks for posting!

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

3 posted 2008-07-11 07:44 PM

This has to be one of my favorites from you. Wonderful write and so true. Library.

~*Julianna*~

"This lullaby is only a few words
A simple run of chords
Quiet here in this spare room
But only you can hear it, hear it..."
-Sara

Gasken
Junior Member

since 2008-07-12

Posts 20
Cebu, Philippines

4 posted 2008-07-12 02:33 AM

Great Poem you've got.. Wish I could make some poems as great as you have.. God Bless You.. (--,)

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

5 posted 2008-07-12 12:37 PM

i still like this poem alot the more i read it

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

6 posted 2008-07-13 01:00 AM

I think that the steady tempo makes up for the initial confusion. And as it progresses, it just gets better. Nice job!

There is power in the pen.

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