The Epitaph Of Broken Truthes.. (The PIP Poem That's Stuck In My Heart)

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RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08

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Australia

0 posted 2008-06-26 01:34 PM

Heya Guys... So i've been here for a while n things atm in my life are going pretty great.. I'm entirely in love with my new bf Andrew.. anyway he was looking at some of my old poems today and he asked me which poem stopped my world just for a minute... I thought for a second and then i re-cited this, i'm not sure how old it is or if what i recited is the exact poem but its what i said word for word..:

Written away in the pages
He's just another memory
I'm sorry he wasn't the greatest
and that he won't go down in history

He will be remembered
but he won't be here forever
he's not worth the effort
he's just a nobody

maybe you will read this
and look back sometime
and realize all this effort
was for you sunshine

rest in peace
this epitaph read
here you lay now cold and dead
drowning in a sea of red
and every word he'd ever said

The poem as i'm sure you'd all know was by clock work orange... so this is my dedication to that poem and the poet.. this poem is burnt in my heart and will be forever, they say every poem touches somebody differently.. this poem touched me enough to remeber every line.

___________________________________________________
(MY DEDICATION, WRITTEN BY ME.. REVENGEISMINE)

The Epitaph Of Broken Truthes

Just another poem, another reason to walk away
But the words this time mean so much and I can’t help but stay
I remember how I felt, the exact day and the time
I rember every single word and how I wished that they were mine

You see he’ll be rembered for how he stood to fight
For the million hearts he made believe are gathered here tonight
We’ve all made mistakes and the scars will prove them all
But where not here forever and its our job to build a wall

There goes my hero so watch him as he goes
Maybe he’ll watch over me that’s if he ever knows
The words of the tempest will forever touch your heart
They’ll burn into your soul, because I’ve had them from the start

*Rest in peace, her epitaph read
Here you lay now, your cold and dead
You drowned alone in the sea of red
From all the words you wished you said*

[This message has been edited by RevengeIsMine (06-26-2008 02:16 PM).]

Clockwork_Orange
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1 posted 2008-06-26 01:57 PM

wow. way better than anything i could ever come up with.

RevengeIsMine
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2 posted 2008-06-26 02:00 PM

It was your original Poem.. u came up with the amazing thing... i played no part at all

Clockwork_Orange
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3 posted 2008-06-26 02:08 PM

im glad your happy. really.

SEA

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4 posted 2008-06-26 02:12 PM

so??? then this poem is not yours Revenge, but Clockwork's??? Is that correct?

It's amazing by the way

RevengeIsMine
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5 posted 2008-06-26 02:13 PM

Thankyou... I hope your happy too.. U do deserve it.. And as i said before.. ur an amazing poet.. don't ever stop writing.. you will change the world some day u know.. just one word, one line and one poem at a time.....

RevengeIsMine
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6 posted 2008-06-26 02:15 PM

SEA plz don't pull it.. the bottom poem.. is my own work.. i will make that clearer now.. please do not pull the poem.. it's mearly a dedication to a great poet.. the poem that inspired me.. n my own poem bein the dedication...

Clockwork_Orange
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7 posted 2008-06-26 02:21 PM

i give her permission to use it.

SEA

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8 posted 2008-06-26 02:21 PM

I needed to clairify honey, I will see if it's ok to stay because yours is on there too.

Clockwork_Orange
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9 posted 2008-06-26 02:23 PM

Revenge? will you read FEEL THESE WORDS?

RevengeIsMine
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10 posted 2008-06-26 02:31 PM

Okay SEA.. i really hope u let it stay...

Read n Commented on Clockwork_Orange

SEA

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11 posted 2008-06-26 02:59 PM

just so you know, it's not up to me. Ron owns the site and has final say on all. I'm checking though and when I know you will k?

Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal

12 posted 2008-07-09 01:46 AM

Wow... This is pretty incredible... Good job...

There is power in the pen.

Falling rain

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13 posted 2008-07-09 03:29 PM

I'm glad both these poems weren't taken off.. Both of these poem are AMAZING.. congratz to you RevengeIsMine and Clockwork_Oranage!

~Zach~

"And so the lion fell in love with the lamb....,"he murmured. "What a stupid lamb," I sighed. "What a sick, masochistic lion."

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