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Teen Poetry #8

How I Deal

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

0 posted 2008-06-09 08:19 PM

How I Deal

So many times I’ve felt
As if you couldn’t
Comprehend how
I dealt with things.
Everyone has their own
Way of dealing with
Trouble.
But does it really matter
How I handle it.
If I were tortured,
And I chose a way
Where I could end it…
Would you notice what
Has happened to me?
Would you notice what
I’ve chosen to do by your
Actions?
No one would ever miss
Care, or me
You would just go by
Living, while I am
Not.
So tell me this,
Do you really care?
Do you really love me?
Would you really miss me?
Would you actually feel
As though everything was ripped
Out from you,
And now you have absolutely
Nothing?
Answer that and then
I will make my decision,
As to how I will deal with all
These problems.

~*Julianna*~

Six Semper Tyrannas - Thus always to tyrants...

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

1 posted 2008-06-09 10:12 PM

NICE! Just one tiny thing...add two more dots to your punctuation at the end or kill the period.

I dunno it just feels open to me, and I want to be able to guess at the ending.

(LOL stupid nit-picking critic lol)

Sanity is NOT a matter of statistics.
The earth is round, germs cause desease, and God speaks.

I am insane of course BUT STILL!!

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

2 posted 2008-06-10 05:27 PM

Thanks for the comment. Ya, I didn't know how to end it so I just left it at that. Thanks for the critic!

~*Julianna*~

Six Semper Tyrannas - Thus always to tyrants...

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