Teen Poetry #8 |
The Part That's Missing You (I'll Never Change, You'll Never Change & We Never Will) |
RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
So I guess this is where I draw the line Battered and broken and dead out of time How did I let it go on for this long? Let it drag out like a deathly song This war is over enough is enough This broken promise is just getting too tough I know I’ve done wrong and I know I’ve lied But this deadly war is killing me inside Eight years to this day my friend almost died And instead of helping I ran to hide I was just a kid; I didn’t know what to do We were all alone and she was bleeding too The car came from nowhere we were playing in the park I told her that we had to go home because it was getting dark She took my hand and we crossed the grass And before I knew it we were covered in glass The car ploughed into us but it you never let me go You held on for your life but I guess that you know Your head was bleeding and the man got out of the car He told me to run but not to go far I don’t know what happened i just run fast as I could I remember my mum telling me I did everything I should I cried for days when mum said you weren’t coming home I blamed myself everyday and prayed that you’d never be alone Then today I get a letter with your name above the seal It took me an hour to open it because I didn’t think it could be real There it was on paper, you never really died Your parents took you away, and my parents lied So apparently you’re getting married, want me to hold your hand You were three years older than me, but I’m your bestest friend on the land I haven’t seen you in so long, that it almost scares me to death What if you don’t like me, what if you’re not the same old Beth But then down on the bottom was words I knew so well The poem you made up the day I tripped and fell I broke my leg that day and mum was so mad You told me she’d get over it and I shouldn’t be sad So today I laid at rest a piece of my past A part of me that died inside was re-born at last But up in my head were the word’s that were true And the only part of me that’s changed, is the part that’s missing you The Poem Beth Made For Me: “You call and I’ll come running You cry and I’ll come near So take this faith Except your fate Cause these are pointless tears Your heart is like the river Your heart is like that hill They’ll never change You'll never change And you never will” |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
W-O-W! I realy don't know what to say! You've outdone yourself Revenge...and thats hard to do! Loved it both the story and the prose! "And the sky...the sky became...PINK!!!" (Seusical the Musical) |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
Amazing poem. The depth is sometimes hard to find in a poem but you brought it out well with this one. Once again, bravo! Library... ~*Julianna*~ |
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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK |
that was an amazing write, extreamley impressive. got a little emotional ha. Belinda~* Expect nothing, Prepare for anything. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Jess you made me cry!!! well I guess there's a first for everything.. lol.. this is beautiful Jess... Great write!! (Library)
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
How many times do I have to say it?? you're an amazing writer and it blows me away every time. Loved it. Library. {~~*~~} {&]ebbing.away.from*my.pain.}} |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
amazing. superb. stunning. glorious. need i go on? |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Jess you really out do your self sometimes!! great poem! Krysti |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
Okay, so I read it again and I just feel like I should leave a comment because you really are an amazing writer. And all those times I said people just don't comment because it's so amazing..well for your poems hun it's true. You will change the world, and I'll be right by your side through it all. Love you Jessie hun! {~Em~} {~~*~~} "You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans!...'cuase dat's just how I roll.." |
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