Teen Poetry #8 |
The Rubik's Cube of Life |
Gravymoose New Member
since 2006-12-24
Posts 4 |
Made this very quickly so it probably won't make much sense, but if it does, enjoy. --GM The Rubik's Cube of Life All mixed up With no focus or aim, The only thing we know Is that we must solve it: The Rubik's Cube of Life It starts with the Foundation Coming from the early years. Family, religion, school, So many parts to the base, But one part sets it solid. That person in your life Who is always on your mind The one who gives you strength And a reason for living. To many the Foundation is never laid. But every so often The stars align, And Bliss peeks its head From out of the darkness. The Foundation is set. And the Cube comes together Row by row, Color by color, And everything seems right. A few turns from Completion. But Entropy has his day too. When you least expect it, He turns and twists life To confusion and disorder. The Cube is scrambled. The person who set the base Is no longer holding it together You have changed and the Cube with it. Traumatized, there is only one option. To find a new base. Nothing comes quickly And you return to the person Hoping that your Foundation will return. You know it's a mistake, But some mistakes need to be made. All doubts are gone When the Cube breaks twice. The Search continues, It's a new phase, A new chance for Completion. So look ahead Into the light, Through every joy and strife. And one day you may just solve The Rubik's Cube of Life |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Ryan, For just being thrown together, this is actually pretty decent. A little re-working to make it more consistent,and it is going to be a hugely wonderful piece. What would you attempt to do...if you knew you could not fail?. |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Yes definatly agreed. Now about the content... I HATE RUBIKS CUBES!!!!! Thats all. "We all lead such elaborate lives, We don't know who's words are true." Aida |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I enjoyed this piece greatly. Although, perhaps this doesn't apply to me very well, I always cheated and took the stickers off and put them back on in the right pattern. Ringo has said it all though; with a few changes here and there this could be even greater then it already is. |
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reddevil013 Junior Member
since 2008-04-26
Posts 12ON, Canada |
I never actually thought of the cube relating to a life. But now that you mention it, it matches almost too perfectly. Great job for something tossed together R.D |
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