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Gravymoose
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0 posted 2008-05-26 01:27 AM


Made this very quickly so it probably won't make much sense, but if it does, enjoy.  --GM



The Rubik's Cube of Life


All mixed up
With no focus or aim,
The only thing we know
Is that we must solve it:
The Rubik's Cube of Life

It starts with the Foundation
Coming from the early years.
Family, religion, school,
So many parts to the base,
But one part sets it solid.

That person in your life
Who is always on your mind
The one who gives you strength
And a reason for living.
To many the Foundation is never laid.

But every so often
The stars align,
And Bliss peeks its head
From out of the darkness.
The Foundation is set.

And the Cube comes together
Row by row,
Color by color,
And everything seems right.
A few turns from Completion.

But Entropy has his day too.
When you least expect it,
He turns and twists life
To confusion and disorder.
The Cube is scrambled.

The person who set the base
Is no longer holding it together
You have changed and the Cube with it.
Traumatized, there is only one option.
To find a new base.

Nothing comes quickly
And you return to the person
Hoping that your Foundation will return.
You know it's a mistake,
But some mistakes need to be made.

All doubts are gone
When the Cube breaks twice.
The Search continues,
It's a new phase,
A new chance for Completion.

So look ahead
Into the light,
Through every joy and strife.
And one day you may just solve
The Rubik's Cube of Life

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1 posted 2008-05-26 09:09 AM


Ryan,
For just being thrown together, this is actually pretty decent. A little re-working to make it more consistent,and it is going to be a hugely wonderful piece.

What would you attempt to do...if you knew you could not fail?.
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Earl Robertson
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2 posted 2008-05-26 08:17 PM


Yes definatly agreed.
Now about the content...
I HATE RUBIKS CUBES!!!!!
Thats all.

"We all lead such elaborate lives, We don't know who's words are true." Aida

stargal
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3 posted 2008-05-27 12:04 PM


I enjoyed this piece greatly. Although, perhaps this doesn't apply to me very well, I always cheated and took the stickers off and put them back on in the right pattern.

Ringo has said it all though; with a few changes here and there this could be even greater then it already is.

reddevil013
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since 2008-04-26
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4 posted 2008-05-28 07:21 PM


I never actually thought of the cube relating to a life. But now that you mention it, it matches almost too perfectly. Great job for something tossed together

R.D

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