Teen Poetry #8 |
Here among the ending |
Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Okay this one guys i think is really bad.. really i do.. im just posting out of bordum. haha. I think im lossing my talent in writing. So anyway.. here it is.. ~Zach~ --------------------------------------------- Well here it is, the ending of time It came just as fast, we're all blind It was hidden by mystery, Forgot by truth. But curled up in fear, listening to the fatal cries. Of children and sinners; all alike. Dirty tears stream down the face of the innocent. Rain of fire, Smoke of fear.. Praying that it'll all go away. Finding my place among the ashes.. The cries and sceams of the forsaken fill the air. Please god, make this go away. Here is the rapture. Hidden by the lies of the mortals.. Like we could of never saw it comeing. ~Zach~ |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
I don't think it's bad. I like it. Great job {~~*~~} {&]ebbing.away.from*my.pain.}} |
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wisdomofthesword Member
since 2007-12-17
Posts 224the last place on earth |
I don't think it's bad at all. Nice write I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so |
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Bahigano Junior Member
since 2008-05-13
Posts 31Nebraska |
I think every writer thinks their writting is bad so i'm here to tell you i thought it was good. mabe not as good as some of your others but it wasn't so bad that i wouldn't read it. love Lea |
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