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Teen Poetry #8
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Baby_Girl
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since 2008-05-10
Posts 21
OH, United States
0 posted 2008-05-13 03:27 PM


Be Mine

Be mine when,
The sun glows indefinitely,
Be mine.

Be mine when,
The moon starts to fade,
Be mine.

Be mine when,
The stars fall from the heavens above,
Be mine.

Be mine when,
Like becomes love,
Be mine...forever.

Baby~Girl
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Bahigano
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since 2008-05-13
Posts 31
Nebraska
1 posted 2008-05-14 03:43 PM

I don't like this one as much as one of your other ones it was good but i have read some of your other work and know you can do great.
always.
Lea

sorry if that is mean i just want to be honest with you.
Baby_Girl
Junior Member
since 2008-05-10
Posts 21
OH, United States
2 posted 2008-05-14 05:24 PM

Hey Guys,
Just to let you know I dont ever think some one is mean for giving me critiques... I really am greatful for it... It is one of the few ways I can grow as a writer... thanks again for your reviews.

Baby~Girl
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