Teen Poetry #8 |
Left Alone In The Spotlight (a lonley duet with myself) |
Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
this sonnet of a broken heart beats into the air half of this duet is sung because only half of the two are there the other half is gone lost inside thier fear and im here on this empty stage wishing to disapear sweating through the spotlight the pressure grows with ease i thought that you would help me out because you made me believe but once again ill fake it and fall right on my face forget those solemn words i spoke of you in perfect grace |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Awwe this is sad.. I like it.. and if you ever wanted to duet with anyone.. im here! lol well back to this master peice i think it was pretty good.. although some parts didn't make sence or just didn't fit in to your story line.. But otherwise Great job!! ~Zach~ |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
This is amazing.. speechless person here.. |
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WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
This is another amazing poem. = ] You're really incredible. One of your many callings. I like the symbolism with the stage, very nice and dramatic. Excellent job. -K Do the day, and let the day do you. - S. King |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
This was perfect! an Absolute MASTERPEICE!!! Not exactly sure what Zach meant about parts that didn't make sence, the whole thing was amazing! "We all lead such elaborate lives, We don't know who's words are true." Aida |
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Tripp'ncutie Member
since 2008-05-05
Posts 73minnasota |
tear jerking drama and bitter sweet, i really enjoyed it. and yes for a duet i am here as well. kk hugs |
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