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Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2008-05-07 02:14 PM

Look at me.
Look into my eyes.
See the broken soul crying.
No you can't cause all you see is my disguse

Hidden behind a mask of sorrow and hate.
Waiting for it all to go away.
But still all you see is the mask of pity.
Living day by day.. but here i lay.

On the floor crying myself to sleep
Living on the lie that you really do care.
But you still don't see me.
Even if you try and stare

Just leave me.
I want you to see
But your too blind to see through my mask.
Don't try to help me. Just leave me be..

Ill stay here inside my mind.
Alone with heart.
Slowly tearing.
Slowly apart.

~Zach~

"Fate leads the willing, and drags along the reluctant."

Tripp'ncutie
Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 73
minnasota

1 posted 2008-05-07 02:36 PM

wow major sweet writing yo. ok ya i like can realate to that. great job, deep.

shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

2 posted 2008-05-07 07:58 PM

That's really good Zach. As always, I can sense the emotion surging within the lines. Great description and great writing. Love this.

TJ

So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful...

spiderilia
Junior Member

since 2008-04-24

Posts 21
Israel

3 posted 2008-05-08 06:44 AM

really good one... many emotions and really sad... the last stanza in my opinion is very powerful... keep up the good work!

wisdomofthesword
Member

since 2007-12-17

Posts 224
the last place on earth

4 posted 2008-05-09 02:00 AM

really nice, i know that feeling

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

5 posted 2008-05-10 04:35 PM

I. Feel. Your. Writing. What I just read was my life. Great job!

~*Julianna*~

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

6 posted 2008-05-10 05:05 PM

Beautiful. Library definatly. You made me think.

"We all lead such elaborate lives, We don't know who's words are true." Aida

pipgurl_95
New Member

since 2008-05-11

Posts 8
Michigan

7 posted 2008-05-11 05:34 PM

I REALLY liked this one of yours...i can TOTALLY relate to it, great job!

imsimplyme
Junior Member

since 2008-04-01

Posts 16
California

8 posted 2008-05-12 04:36 PM

that was really awesome

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