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Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

0 posted 2008-04-28 07:28 PM

Sorry it's been so long guys, I just haven't had any inspiration for a while.

I Am the Outsider

I am the outsider
The one who watches all
And yet engages little
And can not fully fall

I know how my friends do feel
I’ve walked their paths before
But now I stand on the outskirts
And avoid this deadly war

What is this, this game they play?
Which I have played before
Why are these masks in place
As they were in days of yore?

Is even my face mine own?
Crafted out of lies and truth
What simplicity we do destroy
So early in our youth

I am the wanderer
Accepted by all,
And needed by none
Few friends to break my fall

I am the outsider
Philosopher of life
The joy and hate we use to craft
A game with shadows rife

"We all lead such elaborate lives, We don't know who's words are true." Aida

[This message has been edited by Earl Robertson (04-28-2008 09:25 PM).]

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-04-28 09:11 PM

Wow i know how you feel dude.. i've been there.. maybe im still in it? Very good write. I can just feel the emotions in this. Very good =]

~Zach~

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2008-04-28 09:29 PM

your use of launguage astounds.

-Kate

I live in a Bella world. only everyone is blindingly human . . .

masksrlife
Member

since 2008-03-26

Posts 109
Canada

3 posted 2008-04-28 09:51 PM

I loved this soo much! i'v also been here. But I love how it flows and it has so much emotion in it. Enjoyed!

*-crazycece-*

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

4 posted 2008-04-28 09:53 PM

Thanks Guys!

Ri
Member

since 2008-02-01

Posts 67
Blackburn, England

5 posted 2008-04-29 01:43 PM

Yet another great poem, the words flow perfectly, and the message lies clear within them.
I particularly like the syntactic patterning of the repeating "I am"

Good write (Y)

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

6 posted 2008-04-29 07:31 PM

this is great!!

JJ

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