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NEED A TITLE THANK U VERY MUCH
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NEED A TITLE THANK U VERY MUCH |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
HEY CAN U GUSY READ THIS POEM ADN TELL ME IF ITS GOOD OR NOT THANKS HEHE don’t blame me for your problems don’t blame me for the things that I didn’t do But I will blame myself for that I have loved you If you want to blame me for your problems If you want to blame me for you personal things Go ahead because I rather blame myself too I would just rather blame myself When ever u don’t show up I blame myself Whenever I wait for you I blame myself When your having your problems I blame myself Even for the things that I didn’t do I guess it was my fault to love u this much The love that u cant see that I have for you Is this love nothing for you Is it too less for you Or is it too much for you Just blame me I don’t care Because it will be better if I blame myself don’t blame it on me because I will blame it on myself Blame it on myself of the way I loved u Blame it on myself of the way I helped u Blame it on myself the way I got the feelings for you Everything I would like to blame it on myself Because I think your already blaming it on me But remember this love for you will never go away It will never cast away I will blame myself in everyway Even if I don’t see you Even if I don’t get to talk to you I wish you could understand this love Because in love theres no limit For you it might be Because I just cant control this love that I have for you I just cant Its too hard to control it But don’t blame me Please don’t blame me Because I want to blame myself Because I know its my fault Its my fault in everyway Not other people But mine Only mine Just blame it on me Just hurt me Just do Whatever u want to do to me just do it Because I no longer care Even though u didn’t blame it on me Or probably u did But I will blame myself Because I know u blamed it on me The truth is I will always blame myself For the way I loved you For the way I waited for you And I still love you And I still wait for you And I still blame myself for you Please don’t blame me Please don’t blame me Because it will be better if I blame myself |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
it kinda makes sence. But i am a little confused. I'm tryign to think of a title and i just cant seem to find one that fits. Good luck finding one though!  {&]ebbing.away.from*my.pain.}} |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
thank u hwo about if i put it will be better if i blame myself is that good enough |
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reddevil013 Junior Member
since 2008-04-26
Posts 12ON, Canada |
hmm... well, the poem is quite repetetive. but i like it  as for the title... what do u think of "finger pointing"R.D |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
umm thanks for teh compliment how about it will be better if i blame myself |
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shattered-smiles Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 247inside the shadows |
Your style is unique but there is a lot of repeating lines. I find that a little bit distracting and confusing. My advice for the future is not to put so many repeatitive lines even if it does make it shorter. Sometimes, short is better than long. TJ So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful... |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
well um thank u yea i willnot do that wehn i was reading it i was lke wow it repeats but atleast i used differnt words i dont think that it repeats that much |
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