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Some poems of mine
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Some poems of mine |
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spiderilia Junior Member
since 2008-04-24
Posts 21Israel |
Hi there Im new here, and decided to post some of my poems and see the reaction and if someone can give me some tips that would be great... btw ive started to write a couple of mouths ago... so lets go..: My love what can I say to you about the things that have passed? I know one thing for sure that my love, it will last nothing more left to write nothing more left to say I know one thing for sure that my love, it will stay I love you more then life I need you more then sun no more tears left to cry no more strenght left to run no more pain left to feel and no more can I fall I love you with my heart I love you with my soul... Blame me dont blame me for the way I am, the things I've never done, the things Im terrifying from, the fact I've turned around and run dont blame me for the way I felt and for the time I've lost, to see you with him every day, is just a way too painfull cost dont blame me for the things i've wrote dont blame for my mistakes, cause now I know that wasnt right to be the one who always fakes the only thing Im guilty for is that I like you so, I've always liked you way to much, therefor i have to let you go... My life my life had lost all meaning... this for sure, yet somehow Im beliving, the darkness will be gone, Im dreaming, that someday I'll be the one you're looking for, im breathing, though it is hard to breath when you're not with me and I am feeling so alone im seeking, that we'll be together just for a little more, Im living, and you're the only thing Im living for... I hope you had the time to read all those... I would like to know what you're all thinking... I prefer to have you for a moment, live alone and die miserable than never have you, live with someone else and die happy... |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Hey, Hey =] Welcome to PIP! Feel free to write your heart out but within reasons.  lol These poems are pretty good. My favorites would have to be your 2nd and 3rd poem.. I bet many people can relate to those feelings. Well I'll have to get going. Keep up the writing. I just can't wait to see more of your work.  Have a great day!! ~Zach~ |
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wisdomofthesword Member
since 2007-12-17
Posts 224the last place on earth |
hey these are pretty good, I like the second one best I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so |
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crimsonXnails Member
since 2008-02-10
Posts 108dark/little/heavan.:*:. |
hey hey, beautiful poems! welcome to pip !Tracey! if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying |
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hiddensmiles Senior Member
since 2008-02-07
Posts 514at the beach... i wish |
great poems i can relate to them ! welcome to pip! really want to read more from you!! JJ |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
wow! those are really good poems! I really like the first one, and I always like poems that ryhme...mostly 'cause I suck at ryhming ask almost anyone! Welcome to PIP and I hope to see lots more from you. {~~*~~} {&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand] |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Iliya I love this such a sweet sweet poem. Welcome To Passions hope to read more soon Krysti |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
These poems are well written. Welcome! I prefer noon to twilight, but tis a fine line I walk. |
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spiderilia Junior Member
since 2008-04-24
Posts 21Israel |
hi dudes...well havent been around for a couple days... thx for the replies... and yap you'll see me around... I prefer to have you for a moment, live alone and die miserable than never have you, live with someone else and die happy... |
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