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spiderilia
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since 2008-04-24
Posts 21
Israel

0 posted 2008-04-24 01:07 PM


Hi there
Im new here, and decided to post some of my poems and see the reaction and if someone can give me some tips that would be great...
btw ive started to write a couple of mouths ago...
so lets go..:

My love

what can I say to you
about the things that have passed?
I know one thing for sure
that my love, it will last

nothing more left to write
nothing more left to say
I know one thing for sure
that my love, it will stay

I love you more then life
I need you more then sun
no more tears left to cry
no more strenght left to run

no more pain left to feel
and no more can I fall
I love you with my heart
I love you with my soul...


Blame me

dont blame me for the way I am,
the things I've never done,
the things Im terrifying from,
the fact I've turned around and run

dont blame me for the way I felt
and for the time I've lost,
to see you with him every day,
is just a way too painfull cost

dont blame me for the things i've wrote
dont blame for my mistakes,
cause now I know that wasnt right
to be the one who always fakes

the only thing Im guilty for
is that I like you so,
I've always liked you way to much,
therefor i have to let you go...


My life

my life had lost all meaning...
this for sure,
yet somehow Im beliving,
the darkness will be gone,
Im dreaming,
that someday I'll be the one you're looking for,
im breathing,
though it is hard to breath when you're not with me and I am feeling so alone
im seeking,
that we'll be together just for a little more,
Im living,
and you're the only thing Im living for...

I hope you had the time to read all those... I would like to know what you're all thinking...


I prefer to have you for a moment, live alone and die miserable than never have you, live with someone else and die happy...
                        

© Copyright 2008 iliya zaidman - All Rights Reserved
Falling rain
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since 2008-01-31
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1 posted 2008-04-24 04:39 PM


Hey, Hey =] Welcome to PIP!
Feel free to write your heart out but within reasons. lol
These poems are pretty good.
My favorites would have to be your 2nd and 3rd poem.. I bet many people can relate to those feelings.
Well I'll have to get going. Keep up the writing. I just can't wait to see more of your work.

Have a great day!!

~Zach~

wisdomofthesword
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since 2007-12-17
Posts 224
the last place on earth
2 posted 2008-04-24 05:14 PM


hey these are pretty good, I like the second one best

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

crimsonXnails
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since 2008-02-10
Posts 108
dark/little/heavan.:*:.
3 posted 2008-04-24 05:14 PM


hey hey,
  beautiful poems! welcome to pip
!Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

hiddensmiles
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since 2008-02-07
Posts 514
at the beach... i wish
4 posted 2008-04-24 06:05 PM


great poems i can relate to them ! welcome to pip! really want to read more from you!!

JJ

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20
Posts 891
Neverland
5 posted 2008-04-24 06:22 PM


wow! those are really good poems! I really like the first one, and I always like poems that ryhme...mostly 'cause I suck at ryhming ask almost anyone! Welcome to PIP and I hope to see lots more from you.

   {~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

hunnie_girl
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6 posted 2008-04-24 08:47 PM


Iliya I love this such a sweet sweet poem. Welcome To Passions hope to read more soon
Krysti

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
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BC, Canada
7 posted 2008-04-24 09:41 PM


These poems are well written. Welcome!

I prefer noon to twilight, but tis a fine line I walk.

spiderilia
Junior Member
since 2008-04-24
Posts 21
Israel
8 posted 2008-04-27 08:56 AM


hi dudes...well havent been around for a couple days... thx for the replies...
and yap you'll see me around...

I prefer to have you for a moment, live alone and die miserable than never have you, live with someone else and die happy...
                        

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