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XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

0 posted 2008-04-24 09:51 PM

Confusion

worries

lies

defeat,

hearts of gold and rubies.

Crushed, broken and at my feet.

My life among the ashes.

Far down into what I can't feel,

All I see is what is done with.

Nothing that I do is real, not

for you and not for the world.

{~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

[This message has been edited by XxForever.BrokenxX (04-26-2008 03:51 PM).]

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2008-04-25 07:54 PM

Wow Emily I love this!!!! i hope yooh do add more cos it is a really good beginning!!!
Krysti

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2008-04-26 12:58 PM

Wow I love how this all sounds out.. I hope you add on.. or let someone else write to add on

~Zach~

RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

3 posted 2008-04-26 06:48 AM

Emmi i love this... amazing.. plz add on.. i'd suggest stuff but i'm afraid of ruining it lolz.

wisdomofthesword
Member

since 2007-12-17

Posts 224
the last place on earth

4 posted 2008-04-26 10:26 AM

once again great poem, can't wait ot read the rest

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

5 posted 2008-04-26 03:52 PM

okay, i added a little bit but im not sure if i ruind it... tell me what u think.

{~~*~~}

{&]ebbing.away.from*my.pain.}}
{~Emily~}

PAiGEY
Junior Member

since 2008-05-01

Posts 13
victooriaa

6 posted 2008-05-01 10:35 PM

this is so good!
your such a brilliant writer.
keep it up.
would love to hear more!!

xx

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

7 posted 2008-05-05 08:38 AM

Sounds even better added on!! Great job Emily!

~Zach~

"Fate leads the willing, and drags along the reluctant."

imsimplyme
Junior Member

since 2008-04-01

Posts 16
California

8 posted 2008-05-05 01:39 PM

wow that was really deep, i liked the way you set it up it added suspence

Loruh
New Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 5

9 posted 2008-05-05 08:20 PM

Very nice. I like how the poem has a shape to it.

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