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Teen Poetry #8

Crying at the grave

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2008-04-24 04:32 PM

Sitting here
Waiting here for the sunset
Pastel colors flood the sky
Sitting here in a puddle of tears, hands drench wet.

You beauty reminds me of the time we had
Your descease leaves me kneeling at the grave
Left to go on...
without you...Left mad

I know you didn't mean to
Really I do
Just this came all to fast
But what if I knew?

~Zach~

crimsonXnails
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since 2008-02-10

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dark/little/heavan.:*:.

1 posted 2008-04-24 05:17 PM

hey hey,
great write! i was just wondering if the person whos' grave you're at commtited suicide? it sounded that way.
!Traey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2008-04-24 05:30 PM

welllll sort of..

The person died of a disease. And its one of those cronic disease that last for a long time. Thats why i said "It all came too fast". and "What if I knew" cause the person died without me knowing ahead of time..when they could of told you before it was too late...

But your interpretation is pretty good as well. You idea would fit perfectly.

~Zach~

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

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3 posted 2008-04-24 05:50 PM

wow. That was probably one of ur most powerful poems that i've read. Fantastic write.

{~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

shattered-smiles
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

4 posted 2008-04-24 10:02 PM

See Zach? I told you it was an awesome poem!!!

TJ

So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful...

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

5 posted 2008-04-29 08:57 PM

lol Well you were right Tori! lol thanks for your comments guys!

~Zach~

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