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Teen Poetry #8
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masksrlife
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since 2008-03-26
Posts 109
Canada
0 posted 2008-04-12 08:56 PM

I climbed that mountain.
That mountain that we built
together, upon love and
trust

You held me tight.
High upon our mountain.

Than you let me go.
I crashed to the ground.

I start to drown in my
own tears.

Before I feel a gental
hand reaching down to me
in the dim light.

You lift me high upon
the ground.

But this time I grasp you
tight. Not sure if and when
your going to drop me one more
time.

Like and peice of glass.
Prepared to break any
old time.

So please secure me to
your arms and never let
me fall.
      



*-crazycece-*

[This message has been edited by masksrlife (04-14-2008 07:41 PM).]
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Jaki H
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since 2008-01-19
Posts 232
NJ, USA
1 posted 2008-04-14 05:47 PM

ooh! i like!!! dont really know what to say... i liked it all, but maybe take out the "babe"? just my opinion but its good either way.
masksrlife
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since 2008-03-26
Posts 109
Canada
2 posted 2008-04-27 04:04 PM

Thank you glad you liked it

*-crazycece-*
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