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Teen Poetry #8

All That We'll Never Be

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2006-10-19 11:12 PM

Your old yellow shirt engulfs me,
I can only just picture your face.
How your black hair falls in your eyes,
how your arms would catch me in a strong embrace.

Your scent always made me weak,
but it's your eyes that captivated me.
I guess I just miss all that we were,
and miss all that we'll never be.

We were the couple to envy,
everything I always wanted, we were,
I spent my days thinking about you,
while all you thought about was her.

What I saw as perfect to me,
didn't seem to be enough for you,
so I kissed you knowing it'd be the last,
not knowing all you'd put me through.

All your senseless excuses
were piled up with all your lies,
You tore out part of me, tossed it around,
and walked away without one goodbye.

I know i shouldn't miss you at all,
you don't even deserve my time,
I let myself believe you could love me,
so I fell for your every line.

I'll pick up the tears and the shards
of what you left for me to find,
Package them right back up, tape and glue,
and try to forget you were even mine.

I know I deserve more than
all of our distant memories,
I guess I just miss what we were,
and all that we'll never be.

-Erin

AIM-beatufu1tragidy

Tell me what you think about being open, about being honest with yourself.

DreamerSpirit
Member

since 2006-10-02

Posts 240
Buenos Aires, Argentina

1 posted 2006-10-20 12:38 PM

I really liked it...it really made me think..
i'm new to this part of the forum, i'm posting at open poetry..i really liked your writing..hope i can read more of it.

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

2 posted 2006-10-20 10:48 AM

This was really good. The part about the yellow sweatshirt and the black hair was really good imagery. It all came together so nicely. IF I knew how to put something into my library this would go in. THe best I have seen of your writings.

Aeris Nicole
Junior Member

since 2003-08-18

Posts 21

3 posted 2006-11-05 08:13 PM

yah i agree this did have good imagery........i really like your writing style cuz i can relate to it so well.

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