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Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2008-03-13 10:47 PM

im fed up
im tired of rules
im sick of everyone
being so uncool

i wish the world
would just sit and chill
i dont know why we hate
i dont know why we kill
but
everyone just needs
to get there head
theres no need for drama
forget the words past said

let it go
just inhale this cloud
just sit and chill
dont make a sound

we need
a 714
a worldwide peace
in everything

[This message has been edited by Clockwork_Orange (03-14-2008 10:34 PM).]

crimsonXnails
Member

since 2008-02-10

Posts 108
dark/little/heavan.:*:.

1 posted 2008-03-13 10:58 PM

hey hey,
i really liked this poem(like all your other poems), and i totally agree. every one needs to just relax, slow down, and take a breather. maybe we'd all be a bit nicer if we felt nice ourselves. thanx fer the read!
!Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2008-03-13 11:38 PM

"let it go
just inhale this cloud
just sit and chill
dont make a sound"

I like the topic that you wrote in your poem.
But i that stanza makes me think your refering to drugs. idk if you ment to do that but yea just pointing that out. Great write anyway!

~Zach~

~*With the wind and my heart at my side. I'll live the life i want*~

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

3 posted 2008-03-14 10:14 AM

Awesome! Only you wouldn't have outdone yourself with this one! Exelent expression og s very true topic!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2008-03-14 04:57 PM

"let it go
just inhale this cloud
just sit and chill
dont make a sound"

I'm guessing that the cloud is metaphorical...not a reference to drugs...right?

enjoyed this

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

5 posted 2008-03-14 06:02 PM

nice poem truly enjoyed

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

6 posted 2008-03-14 06:21 PM

yes of course...metephorical, i dont do that stuff

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

7 posted 2008-03-14 11:21 PM

It had a wonderful meaning but I'm not sure if I completely liked it, while reading it there just seemed to be something missing and I'm not sure what but it still had a great meaning which I loved

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